Dream Deep

Lyndsey : I would say that you're clearly and vastly mistaken our concerning our comparative levels of writerly talent, but I think my motives would be mistaken for a relentless ...

:D This is beyond wunderbar.

Edited . Merci beaucoup to the both of you! Edited in some things, took some out, killed one of the questions, scratched out the bit about fear, and hopefully ended ...

Thanks for the suggestions, Amelia! I took some of your advice and edited it up a bit - any improvement? Still working on furthering the implied glory of grey; it's ...

... It amuses me that you actually felt you had to write "PS: This is a test" beneath it. :P

Sure, I'll go take a look!

This is a bit too graphic to be PG-13. I would suggest rating it up to R. And perhaps space out the paragraphs? They're rather daunting when all blocked together...

Moved to Fantasy Fiction .

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... I never did get to this on the Cafe forums, did I? #.# In any event, expect a crit, of course! - To be edited into this post when ...

Title Edited - Misspelling

Well, there's really no set rule for that; it's mostly a matter of what you're comfortable with. Personally, I like to start a new thread for each new draft and ...

Ooh, I do like this new version much better. The flow, the mood and the tone has been improved twice over. Really wonderful work on the rewrite. Haha, and you're ...

Expect a critique on this one, Gadi. I don't have the time at the moment, but I read through this once, quickly, and enjoyed it very much. A crit will ...

No problem, Kingdom. I'm glad my comments were of some use - though I am sorry if it came across as a bit too harsh. Hey, when you get a ...